Bio that captures the readers attention.

I need to create a bio that grabs the reader attention and creates an urgency for them to call me as their Financial Advisor. Here is what I have so far:

Gabriel Trigo Joined Merrill Lynch in 2014, as a team financial advisor (TFA) for The Smith Group, with his main focus in investments and financing product specialist. Under the mentorship of Ben Smithi??s 20+ years of experience and TYN Training Program, Gabriel has learned and implemented the financial process of Goals-Based Wealth Management approach to provide the best financial advice possible to each individual client. He helps affluent clients identify their goals and then dedicates tirelessly to create and manage a strategy that best suits their personal circumstances and help them attain their financial success.
Gabrieli??s motto is: i??If it was easy, everyone else would be doing iti?? meaning that you need to work hard for what you want, no matter what the world through at you, you need to keep on going. You just need to believe in yourself and everything else will fall into place. That is exactly what Gabriel does for each individual client. He has a fiduciary duty to each individual client and he needs to help them to the best of his ability to get them to where they want to go.

Added on 26.04.2015 20:09
If you can think of a better motto that inspires and motivates people go for it!