Igh School Student Obesity and Fitnessgram Assessments

Dear Writer,
I need you to make 6 corrections in my chapter 2 thesis paper. You worked on my last order 911287 (chapter 2). Please make the corrections to the 1st document I upload. The second document will be my chapter 2 with my teachers notes showing what needs to be corrected. The third document will be my chapter 1 and the fourth document will be my chapter 3. Here are the six corrections:
1) comment 1 Page 3 Obesity

2) comment 2 Page 3 Two……

3)comment 3 page 5

4) Page 5 paragraph starting To overcome the issue of obesity, there is ……. In the second sentence add According to (author/authors & date), it is imperative to educate teachers, so they …. The correction is adding according to author (date), (see teachers notes from the 2nd document I upload).

5)page 14 Fix the indent. First line 0.49 on the references Tremarche, P.V., Robinson …. (see teachers notes in the 2nd document I upload)

6)I need you to add my chapter 1 references and my chapter 3 references to this assignment/chapter 2. My teacher wants all the references for my thesis paper (chapters 1 3)on this assignment/chapter 2.

If you have any questions or concerns, please let me know.

Igh School Student Obesity and Fitnessgram Assessments

Dear Writer,
I need you to correct fourteen things in my paper. I have already made a lot of the changes. I will upload my paper. You worked on this paper(chapter 2)of a 5 chapter thesis paper that will be between 35 50 pages when finished, and my order number for chapter 2 that you worked on was order # 895303. Please make the changes to the paper I will upload tonight and not to order #895303. Here are the 14 corrections:

1) Page 2 Last paragraph An important fact to consider …….. Teacher wants a source for that paragraph. No source.

2) Page 3 1st sentence They cannot show grades in school because of less interaction with peers. Teacher underlined cannot show. Teacher said, This sentence is not clear.Im not sure if it would be best to delete the sentence or clarify it.

3)Page 4 2nd paragraph Some of the ways to prevent obesity include eating fruits ……. (Waters et al., 2010). This is the first time the source is being used, so (Waters et al., 2010) needs to be corrected.

4) Page 5 Paragraph that starts Today, children show more interest in eating …….. Is the last sentence in this paragraph a direct quote? If not, it should be (Nielson & Popkin, 2003).

5)Page 7 Paragraph starting Fitnessgram makes use of criterion-reference standards …….. Please cite the source earlier in the paragraph.

6) Page 7 Paragraph starting The importance of using Fitnessgram …… Teacher wants a source for this paragraph.

7) Page 8 Paragraph starting The CDC noted that Body Mass Index ……. Teacher wants a source for the first couple of sentences. I think she was talking about the first sentence, but she might have been talking about the second sentence in that paragraph.

8)Page 9 Paragraph starting Although Fitnessgram assessment …….. Teacher wants a source for this paragraph.

9) Page 9 Last paragraph starting Many experts have the opinion ……. Teacher wants to know who are the many experts.

10) Reference page 1st reference America Psychological Association. (2011). Changing diet and exercise for kids…… Teacher wants to know if this is a book title, brochure, article. Books should be in italics.

11)Reference Hirsch Jr., E.D.(2006). The knowledge deficit. Teacher wants to know if it is a book. If so, books should be in italics.

12)Reference Lloyd,L.K., Bishop, P.A. …….. There should be a space between the (& symbol) and Richardson

13) Reference Morrow, J.R., Ede, A. (2009) There should be a (& symbol) between the comma and Ede.

14)Reference Tremarche, P.V., Robinson,E.M.,…….. There should be a (& symbol) between the comma and Graham.

If you have any questions or concerns, please let me know

Igh School Student Obesity and Fitnessgram Assessments

Dear writer,
I need you to correct/edit 9 things in my paper. I will upload 5 documents to make the corrections. The 1st document will be my paper with my teacher corrections. I have made some of the corrections. The 2nd document will be my paper that I have already made some corrections, and you can make the corrections on this paper. The third document will help with the Quantitative and Qualitative mixed methods part. The 4th document will help define the pacer activity. The 5th document will be my chapter 1 with my 3 research questions.

1st correction correct comment 3 from teacher on page 3 of my paper

2nd correction reference research book on page 3 last paragraph because it is talking about a convenience sample. The research book is: Gay,L. R., Mills, G. E., & Airasian, P.W. (2012). Educational Research: Competencies for analysis and applications (10th ed.) Columbus, OH: Prentice Hall.

3rd correction Define or tell what is the pacer activity in the beginning of the paper. 4th document will help this correction. (1 or 2 sentences)

4th correction cite research book on page 4 before where the Sources of Data starts. the teacher has (Gay, Mills, & ….. date)

5th correction In the Sources of Data section (page 4 1st paragraph of the Sources of data) restate my research question 1 from chapter 1 document ( Will frequent Fitnessgram assessment and the pacer activity affect high school students BMI?)Talk about the quantitative method used for this research question. Research questions are in my Chapter 1 document ( 1 or 2 sentences).

6th correction In the Sources of Data section (last paragraph on page 4) restate my research question 2 (Does frequent Fitnessgram assessment affect the perceptions of high school students towards improving BMI?)Talk about the qualitative method used for this research question. (1 or 2 sentences.)

7th correction In the Sources of Data section page 5 the paragraph that starts: A survey …… restate my research question 3 (What are the perceptions of teachers regarding frequent Fitnessgram assessment and improving students BMI?) Talk about the qualitative method for this research question (1 0r 2 sentences).

8th correction Page 6 in the paragraph that starts: In weeks two through six…. ( my paper talks about students keeping logs showing daily physical activity) My teacher wants it mentioned earlier in the paper (1 or 2 sentences).

9th correction In the Design section, teacher wants us to talk about a mixed methods approach because we are using both quantitative and qualitative approaches. Document 3 should help you with this. Open this document and look at page 482 where it says Designs or 3 types (top of the page) Teacher said we are doing the second model the QUAN-qual model. Cite research book when talking about this (1 or 2 sentences).

Igh School Student Obesity and Fitnessgram Assessments

Dear Writer,
I need you to make a couple of corrections to the paper I upload.
Correction # 1 On page 7 second paragraph: Eighty percent of the students……… After the last sentence in this paragraph: The participants recorded an overall positive perception…………. I need you to add a couple of sentences saying if the results supported my hypotheses in reference to student and teacher perception surveys. Add sentences before the discussion section.

Correction 2 I need you to add the volume numbers and issues numbers for the journals in the references.

Igh School Student Obesity and Fitnessgram Assessments

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I need you to make some corrections to my thesis paper. I will upload 3 documents to complete this assignment. Document # 1 will be my final thesis paper that I want you to make the corrections on. Document # 2 will be a former students paper to use as a guide to show you how I want my paper. Document # 3 will be my chs 4 & 5 of my thesis paper. You will need to add references from chs 4 % 5 document to my final paper.br /
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Correction # 1 add an abstract to this paper (maximum 120 words)br /
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Correction # 2 Add a Table of Contents (see former students paper to see how I want it done)br /
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Correction # 3 Add List of Tables (see former students paper to see how I want it done)br /
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Correction # 4 Fix paper numbering. I want it like former students paper. Number 1 doesnt start until chapter 1.br /
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Correction # 5 Add references from chs 4 & 5 document to my final paper. The only reference you dont to add is the 2nd reference Gay, L. R., Mills, G. E., Airasan, P.W. (2011) Educational Research: Competencies …………… That reference is already on my final paper.