Issertation: Chapter 4 Presentation of Data

I will upload Chapter 4 from my dissertation and i would like you to help me with some comments that my tutor has made. Some new stuff must be written which will not take in total more than 1250 words. Please check the comments and the highlighted text. If you need any further detail or information please contact me.
I would be highly delighted if i could have the paper earlier than the deadline