Issertation gender representations in disney

i need some help responding to the tutors comments. the only editing i want is the blue comments (the small changes are already done i only want the big ones that requires editing please) which are available on 10 pages. if it is possible please let me know asap.
Please stick to the comments. i will attach the draft where i tried editing a bit in addition to the paper with the comments. the one with no comments is the original essay, so if it is possible to apply the changes there. or whatever is easier as long as i can receive it completed and finalised so i can carry on from there. if the word count increases i am willing to pay more. thank you

Referencing Requirements:
All mentioned references in blue marker