Issertation Proposal, HRM, Training and Development

Dear All
Here is attach my Dissertation Proposal on the topic Training and Development, a case study of immigration Police Department in Cyprus. The final grade is 50/100. On page 22-23 you can see Tudor general comments. As the Tudor suggest before I start my dissertation I have to speak him on blackboard so that we can work out how to shape the research.
So before you start working on the topic I would like to have your comments how to shape the research in order to speak with Tudor how I am planning to overcome his comments.
Also when you start working on the topic I would like to have the new Main research question, the new sub questions, the new objectives.
Also in would like to have the questionnaire to start working on the survey and interviews.
Regards
Mamas