Nalysis of eBays Failure in Mainland China Market

We have finished a draft business evaluation, and i want to polish and restructure it to make it is looks like Academic writing”.

1.Make the structure logical
2.No grammar mistake
3.More reasonable and persuasive analysis process
4.Check the reference style (our universitys reference guide is attached, it is based on Harvard style)
5.Word limit:3,000

1.Draft, reference guide, project guide will be uploaded
2.There are some references still need to be add (in yellow highlight), if theres some references you can find, please add it, you dont have to add all the references in yellow highlight, thank you.

Added on 01.06.2015 10:10
Add: Our tutor said, we need to make in-text citation for all the theory, data or news, excepting for own analysis or conclusion.