Nalysis of Hong Hong Property Market and Suggested Policies

I have to tell you, after carefully reading of your thesis, my conclusion is that there are major problems in it, which means you have to make big improvement.

First of all, it is not a real thesis. As the common understanding, thesis should set up one (or, sometimes, more) hypothesis in the beginning and try to discuss (or, sometimes we can say, prove) the hypothesis in the following parts. Of course, we can see you try to formulate those hypothesis in the last paragraph of the introduction section. But, in most of the following sections, what you are talking about are mostly a?historiesa, not your viewpoint. A thesis should discuss something, not just narrate the order of historical events.
This is the comment from my professor, I would like you to add an extensive hypothesis and fix the paper.

Nalysis of Hong Hong Property Market and Suggested Policies

It should include a Hypothesis, Literature REview, Background of the housing market( The 1997 and 2003 Housing market crash) and previous polices analysis,,recent price increase and Recent new policy (New stamp duty)analysis and impact in the market.
Recommended policies to keep the property price at a reasonable range.
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