Nalysis of which day is the Sabbath day

I need help editing the research paper so it meets the rubics that I am including. A Grader has read the paper and made coments on the rubics listing changes that must be made.All areas of the rubics must be at a (3) competent level or higher.

Final Score: Does not meet requirement
Overall comments: This is a great start to an interesting and informative paper! Please review comments within. Thanks.


Detailed Results
Articulation of Response (clarity, organization, mechanics)
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate provides unsatisfactory articulation of response. The candidate provides weak articulation of response. The candidate provides limited articulation of response. The candidate provides adequate articulation of response. The candidate provides substantial articulation of response.
Criterion Score: 2.00
Comments on this criterion: It is not necessary to declare what the paper will cover or the steps in the research and writing process; this disrupts the flow of the paper. Please proofread carefully; reading the essay out loud might be helpful.
A1. Introduction
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate does not provide a complete introduction. The candidate provides a complete introduction that includes a thesis statement but no preview of the points that will be covered. The candidate provides a complete introduction that includes a thesis statement and a limited preview of the points that will be covered. The candidate provides a complete introduction that includes a thesis statement and an adequate preview of the points that will be covered. The candidate provides a complete introduction that includes a thesis statement and a substantial preview of the points that will be covered.
Criterion Score: 1.00
Comments on this criterion: The majority of the introduction (including the parts regarding the process of developing the paper) is not clearly relevant to the thesis; the thesis is not present until the fourth page. Please streamline the introduction; it should provide some background for the topic, preview the main points, and state the thesis.
A2a. Points of Research Topic
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate does not provide a logical discussion of the major points of the research topic. The candidate provides a logical discussion with no support from relevant research of the major points of the research topic. The candidate provides a logical discussion with limited support from relevant research of the major points of the research topic. The candidate provides a logical discussion with adequate support from relevant research of the major points of the research topic. The candidate provides a logical discussion with substantial support from relevant research of the major points of the research topic.
Criterion Score: 1.00
Comments on this criterion: The main points previewed in the introduction are addressed in the body, but the organization is sometimes difficult to follow and some parts are repetitive. Consider addressing the main points in the same order they are previewed in the introduction. Also the essay contains numerous unsupported assertions. A general guideline for research-based papers is for each paragraph to contain at least one in-text citation, but often more.
A2b. Credible Sources
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate uses 0a 6 credible sources in the paper. The candidate uses 7a 8 credible sources in the paper. The candidate uses 9 credible sources in the paper. The candidate uses 10 credible sources in the paper. The candidate uses more than 10 credible sources in the paper.
Criterion Score: 4.00
Comments on this criterion: Eleven sources are indicated.
A3. Conclusion
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate does not provide a complete conclusion. The candidate provides a complete conclusion that restates the thesis statement and summarizes the main points of the research paper with no detail. The candidate provides a complete conclusion that restates the thesis statement and summarizes the main points of the research paper with limited detail. The candidate provides a complete conclusion that restates the thesis statement and summarizes the main points of the research paper with adequate detail. The candidate provides a complete conclusion that restates the thesis statement and summarizes the main points of the research paper with substantial detail.
Criterion Score: 2.00
A4a. Reference List
(0) Unsatisfactory (1) Does Not Meet Standard (2) Minimally Competent (3) Competent (4) Highly Competent
The candidate does not provide any in-text citations or references for outside sources used. The candidate provides only some in-text citations or references for outside sources used. The candidate provides appropriate in-text citations and references with several major APA formatting errors for outside sources used. The candidate provides appropriate in-text citations and references with minor APA formatting errors for outside sources used. The candidate provides appropriate in-text citations and references with no readily detectable errors for outside sources used.
Criterion Score: 3.00

The level of competent or higher must be reached in each area.