Oes Pre-maintenance Save Machines from Risks?

in this essay there are a lot of errors so please I want from you to correct it depend on the ((rubric)) and the (( comments)) in the doc from the Instructor to get high grads more than I have now

I upload the rubric on this website take look to it

jk1g/mp2.docx.html

First note : dont add any more sources but you can add more information to make it great depend on the requirements in the rubric and comments in the doc

Second note : in the rubric there are red circles
that what we need to work on it to make the essay great and to get high grads

Thank you