Ompare and Contrast Essay (Renting an Apartment and buy a Home)

I need to fix this essay following the instructions that the teacher said. It needs to be a compare and contrast essay following the format of this example on this website :
Compare and Contrast comparison_contrast_essays_models.htm
Ill attached the original paper that needs to be fix and the comments from the teacher on how she wants to be done. Please make sure to follow her instructions.
The topic is renting an apartment and buying a home