SL Course WORK: ESSAY ANALYSIS/Edition (RUSH WORK NEED BY 15 hr.)

This work is very easy job. Below is my the text.

Personal computers and all software to support these computers are apeearing on many desks of Southeast Division employee. After giving the matter considerable attention, it has been determined by the Systems of Development Department (SDD) that more control should be exerted in coordinating the purchase of hardware abd software to improve compatibility throughout the division so that a library of resources may be developed. Therefore, a plan has been developed by SDD that should be contacted as you begin your search because questions about personal computers, word processing programs hardware and software can be answered by our knowledgeable staff who can also provide you with invaluable assistance in making the best choice for your needs at the best possible cost.
After your computer and its software arrive, all your future software purchases should be channeled through SDD. To actually make your initial purchase, a written proposal and a purchase request form must be presented to SDD for approval. A need for for the purchase must be established; benefits that you expect to derive resulting from the purchase must be analyzrd and presented, and an itemized statements of all costs must be submitted. By following the new procedures, coordinated purchasing benefits will be realized by all employees. I may be reached at X466 if you habe any questions.

The instructions are:

1) Why this memo is hard to read? ( 3 sentences)
2) How effect is the paragraphing?
3) Please revise and actually rewrite the whole memo!

Please finish it by 15 hour from now.